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November 15, 2011 / amivglobus

Penned

They passed notes to each other in class
Sent cards and letters for every occasion
Penned poems and songs to fill their hearts
Wrote their vows, but then

“Goodbye,” she scrawled in lipstick
on the bathroom mirror
and that’s all she wrote

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Submitted to dVerse Poets Open Link Night

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  1. Uneven Stephen / Nov 15 2011 7:46 pm

    Cool poem, thanks for sharing. Glad to see a new face at the “Pub.”

  2. brian miller / Nov 15 2011 8:05 pm

    ouch…everything going write…or right up to…something…leaves me to wonder what it might be…nice poem…

  3. Shawna / Nov 15 2011 8:43 pm

    Strong closing. … I agree. Ouch. 🙂

    And what a waste of good lipstick!

  4. brian / Nov 15 2011 10:23 pm

    did not realise it was your first time as well…welcome to dverse…

  5. Kellie Elmore / Nov 15 2011 10:45 pm

    welcome to dverse! great piece! im following you now! 🙂

    http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2011/11/15/grace/

  6. Victoria / Nov 16 2011 12:03 am

    Harsh, but happens all too often. Well written in a few good lines.

  7. Pat Hatt / Nov 16 2011 12:24 am

    haha fun verse, but the bathroom mirror could be nasty, I’d be sure and tell her to throw that lipstick out..haha

  8. claudia / Nov 16 2011 1:59 am

    ouch…this is sad..a short note ending a long year relationship… nicely penned.. and welcome at dVerse..hope you’re enjoying the place..smiles

  9. The Borg Poet (@theborgpoet) / Nov 16 2011 10:22 am

    Heartbreak and freedom.

  10. Ruth / Nov 16 2011 10:38 am

    Lovely poem, but a sad ending…

  11. amivglobus / Nov 17 2011 4:13 am

    Thank you all for the comments and the warm welcome.

  12. Shashi (@VerseEveryDay) / Nov 17 2011 11:14 am

    Perfect start and then perfect closing.. reminds me of my childhood and then hard hitting moments of growing up… Thanks for sharing..

    Shashi
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/11/whispers-where-you-will-go.html

  13. ayala / Nov 17 2011 3:36 pm

    Cool write.

  14. Poets Rally / Nov 19 2011 9:10 pm

    both sad and lovely.

    🙂

  15. Laurie Kolp / Nov 22 2011 10:44 am

    Great visual contrast… would love to know what happened in between.

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